Try again! I see potential!
Personally, I think the original is better despite the low sound quality it had. This has too many sounds going on, not exactly consistent with itself. I do like the background, though. I just wish the treble was something to smile at... I also feel that this needs to be faster, though it may be the overcast feeling that slows it down more than the actual tempo. I really hope that you try this again. This was my favorite piece from fury 3, and I'd love to here what it'd sound like in high quality. By no means does that mean copy directly, but I strongly recommend strengthening the foreground, using less "squeaky" sounds and buzz-tones, and ditch the quote at 0:53. I think this has potential.